Monday, May 4, 2009

Response by Kelly Byrne

Definitely!! Sometimes when I'm not doing the best I can in an event or sport I hear my family cheering me on and I feel better and I preform much better.  A little thing such as cheering for someone can make a whole lot of a difference to that person. :)
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  1. 6th Grade Reading BlogMay 5, 2009 at 1:52 PM

    critique by Maurilio Estrada
    I agree that when somebody is cheering you on that you do prefrom much better.

    I disagree that you should start a sentence with definitly. I suggest that you start with something that answers the jounal entry.

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  2. 6th Grade Reading BlogMay 5, 2009 at 1:56 PM

    Critique by Vianey Landa
    Well,I think you did a pretty good job on your journal entry.I agree that when someone cheers you on,you defenetly feel much better.Even I have exprienced that when I was in a swimming team.
    I disagree though that you should start a setence with just one word,definitly,because the reader will not understand what you mean.I know that you mean that you are excited but other people will not understand you.I suggest that you should maybe restate the guestion but in a sentence form or rewrite the journal promp.Otherwise your promp is really good and well written.

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  3. 6th Grade Reading BlogMay 5, 2009 at 1:58 PM

    critiquie by:Edith Ruiz

    I agree about you saying that sometimes when people cheer you on it makes you feel better about yourself:) It also makes you be a better person and a better performer. I think that your family are the best persons that can make you feel better.

    I really liked that you gave a description about people cheering you on. My family cheers my brother when he plays soccer, football, or when he is feeling bad they make him feel better.

    I disagree about you starting the sentence with "definitely" because it is not a complete sentence and you don't know what the question is asking you

    My sugestion is that you should start a sentence with the question because that way the person that is correcting your journal prompt can know what the question is.

    Other than that I loved your journal prompt.:)

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