Friday, April 3, 2009

Response by Elmer guerra

Billy worked very hard to save his money , and he had to save up for a very long time . Have you ever had to work to earn money to buy something you really wanted? 

I worked so hard for I can get the Wii and it cost $250. I had to collect coins I found and and gave it to the bank . the bank gave my my money back but on bills .It took me 5 months to get enough money to buy the wii. Yes it was worth it cause now it is so fun in the weekends I can't stop playing it. 
Posted by at

1 comment:

  1. 6th Grade Reading BlogMay 5, 2009 at 1:58 PM

    Critique by: Amy Delgado
    Name of Author: Elmer Guerra
    1)I understand the hard work you had to do to get your money.
    2)We could work on the way you pronounce your words
    3)I do not agree with how you start your sentences with pure I's
    4)Maybe we could work on your sentence staters

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)